Yay! I've just caught up with the story (i've been neglecting to check up on all the fanfics, bleh) and I gotta say I love it. The characters are interesting, and I love the name Finklar. It sounds really oddworld-ish.
You might want to skip a space after everyone talks, just to make things a little tidy, but other than that, I like it. <3
More please!