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04-18-2008, 05:23 PM
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Good luck with the internet troubles! Always nasty when it looks like you're going to loose access for a while.

Nice chapter, the characters of these new sligs are interesting. The surly, miserable, angry guy who frees slaves in his spare time... I hope to hear more from him, why he chose to help them for example, but we shall see. It certainly stops Shrown from looking so bad anyway.
I liked what you did with Shrown, still keeping his secret even after the toher slig admitted to freeing slaves. It shows weakness in his character, which is a good thing cus it makes it more interesting! I'm sure it'll come out sooner or later anyway, but I'm enjoying this so keep writing!
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