Just finished reading the last two chapters. Let's see, some feedback...
Chapter 19: I also noticed this before, but never mentioned it. I mean that you can make good distinction between different characters' personalities. Sometimes, especially in RPGs, it happens that I make my characters act like they have the same personality, the same way of thinking. But you luckily avoid this most of the time.
Otherwise, liked the ending where Anni finally made it outside. Good knack for emotions.
Chapter 20: The naming of Dionysia was a good move (was that the original idea of how to name her?). At first, I wondered who this Warrior could be, and the 'Sligs-pants' lines looked a bit irrelevant, but I might be a bit short-sighted for seeing it through right now.
All in all, great chapters. In the middle of all the exams, it's great to read something interesting for once.
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