ooc: Zerox, can I ask that you space out your posts a little more? It just gets a little confusing when you seperate different characters only by leaving a gap since a lot of people do that for paragraphing.
Just putting a few dashes in the gap or something would be fine. You don't need anything elaborate like Zozo or I
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Croft, was working one day on packing, she was almost sleeping, then Croft screamed:
- I WANT SLEEP!
The sligs heard, Croft had to run. She picked a elevator to stockyards...
She was in trouble with the cameras...
She picked up the Invisibility Chant Spirit, she chanted...
--------------------------------NO WATCHING TIL 25 NOVEMBER 2007---------------
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Rules broken in this post:
1) English and punctuation so bad it makes my eyes bleed.
2) Your character spontaneously appearing in the factory with no entrance what so ever, and don't say she's just been working in the factory since it opened because I'm fairly certain someone would have noticed before now.
3) Use of random characters: if you'd read the rules and 'info and advice for RPG newbies' thread properly you would have seen that they both say 'read the first post of the RPG you intend on joining', aka. W@RF 8. This would have told you, among other things, that there are NO random sligs or mudokons or anyone inside Rupture Farms.
4) Completely ignoring the existing plot: reading the first post would also have told you that the boss, Arnie, is a nice guy who doesn't let the sligs beat the mudokons.
5) Making no sense what so ever! I mean seriously! "She picked up invisibility chant spirit." What does that mean? What does any of it mean? What are you talking about, 'no touching til[l] 25 November'?
Seriously, go read the rules thread 5 times (that's once for every rule broken).
If I sound bad tempered it's because it's past 10pm and I haven't had my dinner yet.
*goes off to eat pizza*