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08-27-2007, 02:12 PM
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Some nice work there. They could use some work, but as they say: "A poem is never finished, it is merely abandoned". My own is linked to my sig, if you haven't seen them already. The best advice I can offer is never force rhymes! have a particular line or intention in mind, and use a thesaurus (or Thesaurus.com) to see if you can make it work, and if not, go in a different direction. The alternative is to muddle through with some weak lines, which isn't that appealing.
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