thread: The ODD poems
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08-21-2007, 01:11 PM
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In 'Elum' amd 'Slig' you used the same word twice ('groan' and 'mask' respectively). While groan could be replaced with moan, I don't know about mask, you'd have to change the context.

'Glukkon' has been spelt wrong :P

The last sentence of 'Glukkon' also is...rather uninspiring. I'm sure something better could really go there...

Otherwise, those aren't so bad.
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