In 'Elum' amd 'Slig' you used the same word twice ('groan' and 'mask' respectively). While groan could be replaced with moan, I don't know about mask, you'd have to change the context.
'Glukkon' has been spelt wrong :P
The last sentence of 'Glukkon' also is...rather uninspiring. I'm sure something better could really go there...
Otherwise, those aren't so bad.
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