Awesome chapter, Dripik! Finlly some action!
At the mention of batons I had a thought, since this is supposed to be a prelude to W@RF. I reember in W@RF 1 there was a slig called Obi who had worked in Mullock's Rupture Farms, who was armed with a baton and kept a skateboard hidden in the factory. I think there might have been other W@RF characters who once worked in Rupture Farms, though I can't remember any in particular. Anyway, it would be cool for some of them to make an appearance.
The other thing I thought of (which I'm guessing crossed your mind, too) was Abe; is he working there at this moment in time? Was he one of the mudokons that worked 'upstairs', since he 'thought he had a good job'? Will Logger ever notice a mudokon with odd-coloured skin?
And also, what happens to Logger when Rupture Farms shuts down? Will he still be present or will he have left by then? Will he be killed by Abe?
One last thing was that in Abe's Oddysee, I think in tunnel 2, there was a mudokon worker to save who appeared to be cleaning a cope of the Rupture Farms logo on which someone had drawn a pair of glasses and a moustache. The rest of the tunnel is covered in graffiti so maybe it's the glukkon's vanity making them order the mudokon to clean the picture? Just thought of that when you started talking about keeping the factory clean (or not keeping it clean, as the case may be).
Phew, long post!
EDIT: Looking back, turns out Havoc's charater, Nick worked at the old Rupture Farms. This could be a problem since he was a high-ranking mechanic. Of course, you could ignore it altogether and I'm sure no one would mind. It's up to you, or you could come up with some reason for him not to be involved in the RG thing.