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I see you added a bit of family history. It's getting better, but the sentences are still kinda choppy. Try to give it some sort of flowing motion, a texture of sorts perhaps...
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see thats my problem iv never been really good with that stuff.
you think you could help me.
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Last edited by strangerdanger92; 05-30-2007 at 12:39 PM..
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