'For some incomprehensible reason, Jennadelle often was like killing her preys than sparing them when she baged them. '
I think it should say 'For some incomprehensible reason, Jennadelle often preffered killing her preys rather than sparing them when she bagged them.' instead
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The fic is awesome, there's so much mystery about her and stuffs, like in your sig....
Makes me think she's some kinda immortal superbeing thing or something.