Yay! The Splat is back! I used to read your old stories until they died out (but I can't really complain, considering my "story" died out as well
). In fact, I think it was after reading one of them that I asked you for comments and criticism of my own story... Which I'm probably going to do a remake of or something. I'll see...
Anyway, this story looks pretty good so far!
I don't even think I've seen any spelling mistakes... Though this bit kinda confused me:
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While doing so isn’t necessary to ‘qualify’ most sligs who don’t usually struggle to get a job for the rest of their career, unless they prove themselves to be particularly talented in a particular field such as mechanics.
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I got the jist of it, but the sentence didn't seem to make sense to me... maybe I just read it wrong, though.
I like the way you're sort of explaining things that we've had in the RPG, too, like that mention of sligs who prove talented in fields like mechanics (like Nick), and your explanation of sligs with numbers and names (since that did come up in the RPG, with #7 slig being about the only slig without a proper name for most of the RPG).
So yeah, good stuff