Yes. Mistsur made some interesting points. This isn't bad at all, it is actually very helpful.
Later on in the story you could collaberate on how the character got the controller. like, maybe some unknown force pulled them to oddworld to help save somehting, or to aid with something that has gone terribly wrong.
However, the story begining is pretty good so far, and I still can't wait to read the rest. the opening is always a good way to grab readers, and you did a pretty good job!
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