OOC: Yes, I'm still here and I check in every few hours. Though, I'm not going to be active in the next week, I'll be away.
Jordan, your grammar and RP-style seems OK, but you should put more detail on JB's entry. He just popped inside the factory. Can you edit your first post, then? Just as an idea, JB could have arrived with the train which brought the spice seeds for Anni.
Oh, and what do you mean on 'blue eyes'? Are you refering to the Slig vizors or the normal eyes? Just checking, since #7 Slig has green eyes, but I meant that on his vizors when I wrote his profile.
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Otto was about to fall asleep when he heard a voice from outside. Someone was calling for Arnie. "Nice timing, pal." he thought crossly as he got out of his bed and sneaked out from the Ex. R+R, trying not to wake Arnie up.
He saw a new Slig sitting across the entry hall, next to the office door. "What are you doing here?" he said under his breath. "We are trying to sleep. Do you know what time it is? See the clock on the..." he said, but since he didn't see any clocks on the wall, he didn't finish his sentence. "Anyways, it's dark outside, surely you have noticed that."
He took his breath, and when he calmed down, he continued. "So, what do you want?" he asked JB curtly.
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