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04-18-2006, 04:12 PM
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Pretty cool, but there are osme lfaws in your tchnology used. First of all, could you please explain how frequencies could possible stretch across a patch of stars when it takes light 300 years to reach earth from the nearest star? And I think you should place your shcracters in a higher time, definately NOT as small as 2015.

Sorry if I jabbered on a bit, interesting writing story though, just try and lengthen your chapters a bit.
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