The composition is well placed, and if I knew what it was like to be a girl telephoning another girl I might be able to comment more.
However there is one suggestion, what does the poem sound like if you change the last two lines around a bit?
Because if we feel pain
We can feel we're still fighting.
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Because if we're still fighting
We can still feel pain.
I know it's your poem, and perhaps my suggestion is not what you had in mind, I understand because literature can be very personal, and any alteration can have a different meaning.
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