Not very detailed, so it didn't really draw me in. Sorry man, just try to work on your writing. Still, it was a good plot so far! Just fix the detail thing, and use a spell checker, I noticied a few grammar errors, and spelling. And try to make the characters sound as the they really should. For example:
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“I recon it’s the third one” said Sekto.
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Sekto dosen't talk like that, he isn't the kind of person who would say "reckon". You misspelled that, I see.
Just work on all those problems, and you'll do great!