sorry, i'll fix it now. personally, usin capitals isn't too important to me, but if it helps make the chpaters readble... i'll do it.
i'm just not very good at grammer, that's all, i'm just trying to tell a story, how how perfect i am at english (which i'm not.
) i'll fix it ASAP.
"( God you're getting info from a guy who has like 2 unssucsesful fanfics )"
aww, don't worry, mine weren't too succsessful before either. i'm sure plently of people will read them sooner or later.
*edit* i've fixed as much as i found in both chapters, i hope it's good enough, and easy enough to read.
well, everything execpt the commas, i kinda don't get that.
but i'll change a few to full stops if it helps.