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What really annoys me in some stories is this:

Jake savs mudokins kap 1

Jake hu was wrkn in a factry caled "Mojos Factry of d000m", was beetn an pud in a sell. Den he decidid two ecscape and he brocke teh sell n ran out. Den tha evel glokin Mojo send aal hes sliggs aftr him(ther was lyke thousnds ov em).
Den dey suroundd jAKE HU RAN FASTR nd den he fel n broke his knes and cryd. Den teh sligs tuk himm to mjo's ofis n den he was scard n stuff. So mojo wnts to kil him n Jake runs awy frm him n gets agan surunded by 100 sliggs but den jake kill thm wih his gun and run to a portl were he kanted n was frii n met abe n munch n bigfase n big rising n de 3 wirdose n dey aal nededd jaks helpl so dey asc hmi tu resqu al tweh modokins at mOjos Fcatry of d000m...
two b contnud.......................................................................


I relli lyked dis captr cos it ws excitng n stuff n dis iz jst teh begnin ov jakes's jurny!!!
plz giv meh feetbak cos i wna see hu ov u thnk dis is gret cos i relli like it n i wna continu dis!!!