I too hate Mary Sues. I don't want Dante to die (remember our idea Dave?) but I'd like it to have a more Oddworld style ending rather than a happy sunshiney ending. Good chapter, if short. In a way I look forward to the last chapter, but in another, I dont want this to end. Write a third one Dave! Perhaps you could have him travel around the factories, if he survives this fic?
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