YAY that was a good one xx_xx_odd
jus' one more critique don't have too short sentences, it can in the long run get annoying, otherwise I'm looking forward to read more
Why I'm giving you tips and stuff is that, I'm going on a course in how to write and get better on grammar and so on, but that's an English course though... I like it so if ya have any wonderings, jus Pm me and I'll help ya out as much as I can
