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10-11-2005, 08:23 AM
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: Sep 2005
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Thanks for your comments believe me it took me a long time to figure out the plot to this story. There is going to be other elements besides a circus to this story as well that you will find interesting. Such as a mass underground Feeco Transit system like a subway that is used by the keepers to travel across Oddworld in serch for new inhabitants to add to their freakish collection. Thats just one element theres tons more. Plus you will see a lot of back stabing from one of the characters in this story. Lets just say a character your going to love to hate. As for the illustrations I figured out how I am going to do them. I want to keep writeing this story so it doesn't sink into the cracks of these forums. So I will post the illustrations after every five chapters. To be honest I havn't started those designs because I have been very busy with work and all, not to mention comming up with the plot. But I now have a clear picture of what Skeeb's world will look like so its going to be after every five chapters instead of every chapter. Thankyou for your comments and I give you chapter 2

Chapter 2
Ladies and Gentle Gluks!

Pounding noises were heard throughout the vast halls of the Freak Dome, The arena was filling up quickly as a show was about to begin. The freaks were in there cages being taken to the center of the arena. Skeeb knew that tonight was an important night because it was a show. Like what he said before he must put on a great act or else. Now at that time Skeeb wasn't very acquainted with his freakish inmates. He only knew their names and their backgrounds. But that is about all he knew about them. What he didn't know was that these guys were going to play an important role in him escaping. Suddenly a Blug guard came and zaped Skeeb in his cage with his electrical baton.

Blugs were the henchmen to the Keepers. They were ugly creatures more so than a slig. They were large bloated creatures similar to that of a tick. Their heads were small but their bodies were fat and huge. They had insect like arms which allowed them to carry more weapons than just a baton. All blugs constantly had slobbering issues at the mouth where they would drool. Some say the Blugs love to drink their own drool but nobody knows for sure. Blugs were cruel taskmasters to the Keepers and like most inhabitants of Hellfrez they are blood suckers.

"Move you fool! I don't have all day for you and your inmates. I was suppose to have today off but noooo! I get to play with you fools!" as the Blug slobbered all over Skeeb. Just then he took his cigeret and lit it and started to smoke. "Heh you are a special freak arent you! If it wasn't for you I would be out of a job!" said the Blug. His enormous body over shadowed Skeeb in horror but he knew that the Blug was simply messing around with him. All Blugs do such things to intimidate the inmates before shows.

The arena was filling up with people from all over. There were Glukkons, Vykers, sligs, Clackerz, Interns, and just about any industrial or natural inhabitant who were from the big cities you can think of from Mudos filling the vast arena of the Freak Dome. Now Blugs were the Keepers taskmasters but there were also sligs guarding various entrances to the Freak Dome as well. The Keepers had speacial relations with the Magog. The Keepers belonged to an organization called the Entertainment Dynasty. This organzation consisted of Keepers, Blugs, and other various inhabitants who are native to the frigid continent of Hellfrez. Skeeb was in the wrong place at the wrong time.

Just then Bass, who was next to Skeeb spoke. "What are we going to do? I don't think I can handle this!" Skeeb answered, "We are just going to have to play our parts." Skeeb notice that his color changeing abilities were growing a little weak. He was afraid that he will not be able to perform well in the show. Suddenly the floor in the center of the arena began to rise and all of the lights of the arena turned off but a single spotlight flashed down onto the riseing platform. Skeeb knew that this was the beginning of the show and the ring master named Sarlast was about to emerge out of the platform. Sarlast was the lead ring master of the Freak Dome. He was incharge of everything. There were other Keepers who were ring masters but Sarlast was the most feared.

Keepers looked like over grown leeches with tentacles emerging from the head. They wore thick fur coats which hid their ugly black worm like bodies from the rest of society. Sarlast had a scar on his face and his eyes were glowing red.

His evil grin made him the most feared Keeper of Hellfrez. He wore a fur hat that hid his tenticals but he always removed it at every show. The people were in amazement at his stance of glory upon the platform. Then he spoke with a loud crackleing voice. "Ladies and Gentle Gluks, welcome to the greatest show on Oddworld! Tonight, give your attention to the cages in the center of the ring. I give you the Swig!"

The crowed cheered and Skeeb's cage was opened. Skeeb was hidden in the darkness of the shadow but the spotlight filled the front of the cage. Two white eyes blinked out of the darkness of the cage. The crowed was cheering and chanting "death to the Swig!" Skeeb knew that his act would be a fight to the death with a beast. Scared of the possible outcome, Skeeb emerged from the shadows slowly like a fleech and the crowed roared. Suddenly a massive door opened and a beast came out. The beast was known as a Clask, a massive worm that lives and borrows in the cold snows of Hellfrez. The Clask started snapping its two large beaks and Skeeb suddenly slithered away back into his cage.

The ring began to transform into an envirorment in this case a jungle. This was so because the Keepers were also masters of illusions. Now Skeeb curled his helpless body in his cage and the beast was approaching. The other inmates looked on in fear that if Skeeb dies they must take on the Clask. But something was about to happen that nobody in the crowed nor the inmates knew would ever happen. Only Skeeb knew and it was only a matter of miniutes.
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