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10-03-2005, 05:03 PM
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Nice work, DS. There's only one little thing that I spotted that could be improved and it was this:

"Yes? What is it, Stranger confirmed."

That should say "Stranger asked" because "confirmed" is not really the right word to use for that statement. Other than that, it was a great chapter. It seems that Stranger's starting to get a bit demanding, isn't he?
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