Wow.......I really enjoyed reading that chapter. Dante better watch his back because he came a hair of getting caught by the slig!
Anyway, I have no criticisms because your writing skills are superb.
I'd really like to see your story as well, Scrab-Meat! It sounds interesting.
I'm writing a fanfic on another forum, which is based on another videogame, in a similar fashion as yours, but I'm still not even finished with the first part of the story, which will probably be about 100 chapters, too.
