Whoa.
An interesting read.
Constructive criticism? Not much to give. None in the way of criticism, anyway.
I think that if there was more of a conflict between Walter and Ernest, i.e. Walter offered up excuses and threats and tried to fight, and then Walter is all like, "Whoa, not important, chill out, etc. etc." And then Ernest tries to run for help, and Walter cannot take him by force, it has to be Ernest who decides to come with the angel ...
I dunno. Do what you like. I still think that it will do as is, but if you must make changes ... okay.
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