I liked it! There's nothing wrong with speech, action is good but dialogue can be just as good if its done well (there were maybe the odd bits that didn't quite seem right, but on the whole it was great, if a bit short, not that I can complain about that.)
"First off, you need to find a way to get into the heater without there being too much hot air to kill you, second, to get the hatch open the heater needs to overheat, and that’d kill you."
Heheh, funny!
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