ooc: Beavis core, you seem like you've got a lot of potential as an RPer (your grammar and style are great, plus you have some good ideas) but there are a couple of things you've missed.
First, the rule of no random entrances, you've gotta get your character into Repture Farms somehow (to make it easier we pretty much allow random characters outside of the factory). The other thing is you have to have at least some idea of where other characters are. My character, Jim, is standing in the middle of the cafeteria so if Will had walked in they probably would have spoken.
And AVD, there are at least three other characters in the kitchen, sligs and mudokons (and a grubb i think). If you wnet in there they wouldn't ignore you, and if you started a fire in there, they wouldn't sit around and continue their conversation, again, be aware of what other people are doing.
Stivik arrived at the weaponry and looked around. The stuff here was all pretty old, but it would do him. He grabbed a couple of grenades and some rounds for his gun, and then ran off in the direction of the old part of Repture Farms.
(ooc: Beavis Core, i reccomend you rewrite with your characters entrance). Jim stood in the empty cafeteria for a few seconds, but the smell of food from the kitchen was enough to spur him into action. Praying the place was slig-free (it would be the first to be answered in a long time) he walked to the kitchen and stuck his head round the door.
Inside there were three fellow mudokons and a blue thing curled up on the floor. Tentatively Jim stepped inside.
Jim; "Uh, hi... I'm Jim." Well, he couldn't see any more sligs. he smiled to himself.
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