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07-12-2005, 01:42 AM
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Cool, good chapter. Nice stuff about Jick working out how to kill him. But who is the traitor? And when you say the boss, do you mean Splinterz? Also 1 little error I found:
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He’s alive?” I asked.
“Yes. He’s about the only one who did!” Pox said.
It sounds a biut wrong. Maybe it should have been:

He survived?” I asked.
“Yes. He’s about the only one who did!” Pox said.
As it is more grammatically correct. But still, a good chapter!
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