Yes, good chapter. I will say one thing though: You could have described it more. Not everything form the healing to the battle needs to be in 1 chapter, you can split it into 2 or 3 chapters like:
1- how they were healed and Tealos and the Grubb talking
2- Tealos and the Grubb getting back to the village to find the war.
This gives more description, more suspense (end the first part with simply 'Sligs' cried the mudokon) and lengthens the story so it lasts longer. Just some constructive critiscism, so keep it up, this story could be very good.
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