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06-18-2005, 05:19 AM
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Very good I really like this story, it has so much description that it lets you imagine it much better. Here were my favourite bits:

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At this, one of the executioners ran from the hall in tears, and across the city many a television was switched off in disgust (“No violence? Then what good is it!?”)
That made me chuckle it did. And:
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That’s it? No torture? No water in the face? No 50 lashes with a whip? Good Odd, and you call yourselves masters of justice? Whatever is the world coming to?”
That was another funny bit. But there is one thing I need to point out:
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“You have been found most disgustingly guilty of treason against the crown, the corporations, and the almighty dollar!”
Oddworld doesn't use dollars, it uses moolah. So surely it would be the almighty moolah? But still a very good chapter. I look forward to the next!
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