[Splat]

sry, ur posts are a bit crampt together, it's hard to make out what you're saying. space out what your saying. Leave gaps between different characters speech and action.

Like so! Also put "speech marks" when your character speaks! Otherwise we can't tell it from action.


Stivik: "What scrab? The scrab is dead, thanks to Anni and her pets. And telling the guards you're trying to escape won't get you anywhere idiot."

Stivik pulls out his second grenade.

"I think it's about time someone closed those gates."

He switches his radio back on and speaks to Nick. "Hey, Nick. Can you close the stockyard gates from inside the building? Cause if not I'll have to try a more... physical way."