This is a bit interesting, although I have read many stories such as this before. It's well-written, in my opinion, but there are a couple of things that could be fixed. (Well, one that NEEDS to be fixed, actually.) One is that where you put "Carl ran off from me and Carl...", but shouldn't that say: "Carl ran off from me and Humphrey..."?. Irwin is the one speaking there, right? Also, where you said that "All he can think about is evil.." that could've been worded better as well-have him say something as "he thinks of dark, sinister thoughts...murder....pain..." that would just sound better, in my opinion. Other than those two minor things, the story is good.
