The ending was alright, I thought. It builds tension for the next chapter, though I think the smack on the chin needs to be bigger. try something like,
It responded instantly by swiping upward with it's arm that had the gun in it, catching Scorp smartly on the chin and throwing him backwards onto the floor.
It's just that bit more exciting.
However, I will say that that chapter, was without a doubt, the best so far. You've built up tension well and kept up an exciting fast pace. It's good. The "Verd, speak to me," was actually a pretty effective sad moment which helped build up the the tension of the rest!
Congratulations!
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