thread: Mullocks Return
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05-31-2005, 05:59 PM
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That chapter was good, chirpy-I liked the whole idea and the layout of it was good as well. The only thing I can tell you is to bring the mood of the story out a bit more-be more discriptive with the characters and setting (You could've described what the mine looked and felt like, and other things. ). Other than that, it was a very good chapter.
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