Yeah, I've gotta agree with Dancing Steef on that-this one, by far, was your best one yet, chirpy!
You brought out Molluck's personality very well in that chapter! You made me hate him, and that, in my opinion, is what makes a good story-it makes the reader either love, like, hate, or become annoyed with a character! You've gotten even better on this story since I've last read it-keep it going!
