thread: Slaga's Faith
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05-08-2005, 12:15 PM
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Nice chapter, Sliguy. There was one thing that I thought was a bit awkward in that chapter, and it was: "Slaga, if you don't complete this quest, all of Oddworld will be both angry and upset at you." It makes sense, but I was wondering why Oddworld would be angry and upset with him. You could've said something like, "Slaga, if you don't complete this quest, all of Oddworld will be both angry and upset at you because not only would the inhabitants be overpowered by Gertian, but they would also be in poverty due to his selfishness." That was just a very minor thing I found, though. Other than that, the story's great!
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