Mudling, i would have to agree with Gretin about some of the stuff like that trap and the water on RG-49 and throwing in the recording in the trial. You don't have to try your hardest to effect the story as well as you can. Just go with it, don't feel people will ignore you if you don't change everything.
Ignore the tape in the trial and the random trap. It goes a little over the top.
But ok, if Stivik left his door unlocked in his hurry to talk to Arnie then it's ok. But give Noe a reason to be walking around the slig's bunks first if you must. Say he's looking for someone or something, wonders into Stivik's room, sits on his bed and feels the box. Otherwise it's ok, this could be going somewhere good.
Actually the box doesn't have a playback button. Once it's recorded all Stivik can do is send it. But Noe can have a look at it. Flashing lights and small buttons, it may interest some. But I doubt Noe wants to get himself pulverised by sligs so don't do to much. Press a button if you must, I'll think of a result.
Bare this in mind and you'll get on a lot better with everyone. It's when you try to do to much that people get annoyed at you, and not ust Gretin.
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