Well....finally got around to read this chapter, sorry it took so long.
What can I say? I'm really impressed with your writing style, like I've already said. I like when I need to use my English-Polish dictionary while reading a fanfic.
You're right- most of the fanfictions are really badly written, but still- they get a really huge number of comments. Why support something that doesn't make any sense is beyond me (sure, no need to be rude for some people, but please....sometimes, while reading a story with 100 plotholes- and even worse- without ANY plot, I'm sure that even I could write better things in English and my English is not all that fantastic as everyone can see :P). So it's sad to see a good author who feels underestimated. Really Dipstikk, no need to be bitter....I'm sure there are a lot of people who are really enjoying your story. And I'm one of them
I agree with Super Munch, most of the fanfiction writers wouldn't care as much as you did for that 'Stranger's hunt for the ammo' scene. Not only you decribed it very well- you did it very interesting to read (sure, sometimes there are beautiful describtions in stories, but usually they're just boring...yours wasn't and this is a rare ability
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“Yo, man. I’d watch out if I were you,” a Chippunk said to another. “There’s some douchebag with a rock and it looks like he’s going to—YOWCH! Son of a b—ugh...”
Stranger hated people who spoiled the stealth approach. He knocked out the one who was warning the other, who passed out.
That really made me laugh
Stranger grinned. It was a shame there wasn’t a crowd around to see that. If you’re that good, it’s okay to show off.
I liked that line a lot for some odd reason.
And poor Pugsley.... I'm waiting for another chapter, yup.