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10-27-2001, 06:41 PM
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"Der want yer want with me...but let her be" -- want=what?

"something small and white flew out of the trees and rammed into his gun, knocking it out of his heads" -- heads=hands?

apart from those small mistakes, a very good chapter, up above even your usual standard! keep going...
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