thread: 'Alliances'
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10-21-2001, 02:59 PM
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Smick: Shall we kill them? Come on!

Ludd: This in't our fic, let's keep out...

Smick: Aww... You sure?

Ludd: Besides, they're the good guys, it wouldn't look very good on our records if we went around killing other people's good guys, would it?

Smick: Suppose...

hehe another good chapter, rach. one tiny pointless nitpick - i wouldn't have Lunic saying "I know", i'd just skip that and just have him say "Have Goliath carry him,...since he's the strongest." i don't know why, it just doesn't sound quite right like it is...

but if i can only find one petty thing wrong with it, it's obviously a brilliant chapter...

hehe, you want to draw a picture of Shriek hopping? it sounds funny...
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