ooo, suspenseful...
one tip for the future - if possible, i'd advise you to avoid synoptic sections like "For the past few months Spider and the other Drakkics have wandered, never staying in one place for long to avoid being found by bounty hunters." i find it much better to get straight into the action, and leave the readers to work things like that out for themselves...
they're gonna try and repopulate a race with 12 individuals? does anyone else forsee this getting a bit incestuous?
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