wow... that was a pretty good one. Great emotion at the end and with the flashback-memory thing. Again, it's getting interesting.
One thing I recommend you do is try to use more varied language. Like above,
"I used my arms to pull me forward in the cramped tunnel and pushed on all four of my paramite legs to speed through the tunnel. It was dark, but the echolocation guided me through the tunnels."
Just saying tunnels, tunnels, tunnels can feel pretty bad when you read it. Use different words. ...and pushed on all four of my paramite legs to speed myself forward. It was dark, but my echolocation guided me through the tiny passages."
It does make a lot of difference to the overall effect.
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