Okay, I think I've got something now.
I wandered around for a while, half dazed. I finally reached a river. My fever was so bad that it was like I was seeing things through gauze. I heard a voice to my left. Hungry enough to not care who it was, I approached it. I saw a white Gabbit in the distance. I ran over to him, hard as it was, and said, "Excuse me. Would you know where I could find food?" The Gabbit turned around, and I recoiled in fright. Its eyes were completely white, and the pupils were clouded over. I screamed and turned to run. In my feverish state, I couldn't see where I was going. I fell into the river. More blackness arose, and I was more than happy to welcome it. I woke up, coughing and sputtering. I heard a voice that sounded far away say, "I thought you would never wake up." Through blurry vision, I could make out the shape of a Mudokon.
Well, what do you think? This is my very first first-person story, so I want to know if I'm good at this.
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