[Oddsville]

Hey people please tell me what you think of my story I know its not as good as "Fragments" by Rettick (WHICH IS VERY GOOD), but give me a break Im new at this...

Chapter 2:

We Quickly took the Mudokon and put him in a pile of straw that Blitz slept in.
Everyone quickly gathered around the severely beaten Mudokon asking us what
had happened to him. Suddenly all the questions stopped and everyone turned
their back to the beaten Mudokon. “Blitz whats going on?” I asked wondering
what everyone was looking at. “Its him” Blitz replied, “who?” I asked getting
angry. “Listen there was something I forgot to tell you when you first arrived
here.”

Blitz looked at me with concern. “...What are you talking about?” I said getting
utterly concerned, “ahh” he sighed. “Listen, a long long time ago before I first
arrived here there was one just like you. He was a Kinto Slave, he wasn’t normal
though he started predicting things that hadn’t happened yet-”. “He could predict
the future.” I interrupted, “- yes kinda like that. Anyways every once in awhile we
would get a new slave with sever wounds and... he healed them. Just by touching
the wounds. Over time he got the name The Prophet, one of his most popular
predictions was that another one just like him would show up one day and he
would be the chosen one.”

“How would you know he was the chosen one?” I interrupted again. “Im getting to
that” said Blitz angrily. “The Prophet said that he would have the marks, but thats
all he said.”. I just sat there wondering if Blitz was telling the truth. “But I don’t
have any...marks?” I said hoping I was right. “Kite! your birthmark. Thats why
everyone was ignoring you the first day you arrived, they where afraid you would
draw the attention of the guards.”. I sat there in shock suddenly remembering my
birthmark. I was snapped back to reality when I relized I was being pushed aside
by someone. When I looked up I saw him, the prophet. Blitz was right he looked
exactly like me, exept older. As the prophet pushed me away he noticed my
birthmark. “You!!” he said in a raspy, surprised voice.

[ July 16, 2001: Message edited by: Oddsville ]

[ July 16, 2001: Message edited by: Oddsville ]