It's a good story, but I have a few gripes. Sure you can identify with the character, but I don't think the races are portrayed as they should be. A prime example is in the first chapter when a slig says "Marn, you incompetent fool!" Now what kind of slig would
A) know the name of one of the slaves, and
B) know what incompetent means.
I think it would be more fitting to have a slig saying something like "You dumbass!" or "What a retard!" or something. But that is just my 'constructive criticism.
Other than that, I think it's a really cool story, so keep up the good work!
