word of advice, just because no one is replying to your fic doesn't mean no one is reading it. Peeps here seem to have a phobia of replying to fics (believe me I know...so does Teal and Rettick).
In other words I was reading your old one. I would give you tips for future fics...but I have server(sp) writers block and my brain won't let me write anything constructive.
But as you wish I shall delete the old topic for you in 5...4....3....
Edit: 2...1...its gone. Oh and I did think of some writing advice.
When you type a fic, separate it into different paragraphs. It makes for easier reading. For example:
Instead of writing it like this:
Morning came about the Raikez Mudokon villige, and the tribe's best Tomahawker, Omni , walked outside his windmill-hut and went behind it. He found a few dead flowers , then sat down holding his tomahawk out as if it were as light as a feather. Then as he sat he began to meditate-chant. As he did , he began to rise about a foot in mid-air , then haulted were he was. A few seconds after he rose. His chant made the flowers revive themselves and blossom more beutiful than ever.As Omni stopped chanting , he slowely drifted to the ground and got up. "Well that was a good start for morning work ",He said as he started to stretch his arms. Then suddently a crawling slig arose from the forest. " YOU !! YES YOU ! THE UGLY ONE WITH THE HAIR!!!!", the slig said in a raspy voice."Who do you think your tlking to.....Crawly!",Omni yelled back.
Write it like this:
Morning came about the Raikez Mudokon villige, and the tribe's best Tomahawker, Omni , walked outside his windmill-hut and went behind it. He found a few dead flowers , then sat down holding his tomahawk out as if it were as light as a feather. Then as he sat he began to meditate-chant. As he did , he began to rise about a foot in mid-air , then haulted were he was. A few seconds after he rose. His chant made the flowers revive themselves and blossom more beutiful than ever.As Omni stopped chanting , he slowely drifted to the ground and got up.
"Well that was a good start for morning work ",He said as he started to stretch his arms. Then suddently a crawling slig arose from the forest.
" YOU !! YES YOU ! THE UGLY ONE WITH THE HAIR!!!!", the slig said in a raspy voice.
"Who do you think your tlking to.....Crawly!",Omni yelled back.
Also be careful when you use the commas...don't overuse them. If you have MS Word or some other text program that has a spell/grammar checker, type your fic in that and run the spell/grammer checker program when you are done.
I am not trying to tell you how to write...these are just tips from an experenced writer. Other then that you got a good fic here.
[ December 11, 2001: Message edited by: Dragadon ]
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