[Danny]

hehe, kilk forgot the ceiling...

i've decided to start reading your fics here, if only so i can see how Hoth, Lunic, Juk, and Felth turn out... also, i've decided that i'm not going to just say 'it's good', because i hate it when people do that to me, so i'm going to give you constructive criticism, if that's okay?

one question, why was spider expecting Delta's reesponse at the end of chapter 3, when he knew nothing of Shriek's past with him?

and a word of advice: be careful not to make the characters too obvious and one-dimensional. what you've done with most of them is very good, but i think you've made Kilk and Juk a little... what's the word? i don't know the word, but i expect you know what i mean.

sorry if i'm being too critical, it's just that i'm giving you the kind of reply i wish people would occasionally give me...