Better. My only real complaint has been an ongoing one: your 'slig accent' is more than a bit over-the-top, in my opinion, and it sometimes drastically changes the emphasis in a sentence, so that it doesn't sound as good. I will reiterate that I think that you should only type to/too as 'ter' and you as 'yer' when it would be pronounced like that...
As an example of this: "I don' want to hear how much more terrible than everyone else's yer life has been." ~~ It is impossible to emphasise the your/yer in that sentence without sounding ridiculously stupid. On the other hand, "I don' want to hear how much more terrible than everyone else's your life has been" sounds much better, and much more true to the accent. I know you are trying to be consistent, but there are times when you should read the lines out loud and see if they sound right...
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