Brilliant Dave... some really excellent characterisation, scene setting and description... I could almost smell and taste what was going on... never mind visualise it..
However... Don't have a go at me for making one small suggestion...BUT... In the prologue Vladimir calles Dante a C*** and then later there is a lot of F**king this and that... and well... I don't think it actually adds anything to the plot or story... infact I think it detracts from your genius!
Just a thought....
CB
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PS... you can class me as a fan too!
Last edited by ClaireBear; 04-08-2004 at 02:03 AM..
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