Yipe! Fuzzles with big, sharpsharp teeth.... O.o
It's pretty good, though I might advise getting someone to beta-read it for you, checking for spelling, and grammar... Most of my fics need that alot.
Also, it would read a little better if you started a new line for each time a different character spoke.
Otherwise it's rather good, and I might keep an eye on this one.
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