This is another good story just like Splat. I also enjoy the length of your chapters, it makes you want to keep reading in that way. Along with a good plotline, and if you develop the characters throughout the story this will be another memorable story. Pity for the people who only take time to read a few popular ones. But no worries about this trust me. My stories were quite good, just I never had a lot of different people read them which I always wanted so dont worry. Once the contests get up and running, the fan fiction winners will be posted in a sort of Archive in FC, so they will always be around to be seen. Keep up the good work, and I hope to see an update soon along with Splat if you still are working on that story too.
-Sincerely Al the Vykker FC Mod