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Sal the Mudokon 05-23-2002 08:45 AM

Abe's Oddysee Poem
 
Hey! I wrote a poem. Tell me if it sucks and if it's any good, where should I send it to?

Abe's Oddysee

The natives sit,
Staring at the stars.
Not knowing their brothers,
Chains and the bars.
Yet somewhere off,
In another land.
A savior’s sky,
Beholds his hand.
But time will tell,
This hero’s tale.
His fate as fickle,
As a blowing sail.
Swinging from directions,
East and West.
And unknowing of,
Its place of rest.
For rest is not,
A word for Abe.
He knows nothing but,
His fellow slave.
Whom is trapped alone,
In places rotten.
Punished for sins,
Long ago forgotten.
But forgotten sins,
Leave lasting marks.
Putting many in the,
Ruptured Farms.
Where they cut the beasts,
For a special taste.
But when testing comes,
Now Abe must face.
These creatures of dark,
And of little sight.
The amazing scrab,
And the paramite.
But there’s never time,
For mere curiosity .
Not in this tale:
Abe’s Oddysee.



Okay, Now: Does it suck?

Xavier 05-23-2002 05:00 PM

I liked it!
very good

kleeng 05-23-2002 06:01 PM

I like it too.
It reflects the feel of Abe's Oddysee verry well.

Send it to
OWI Fan corner?
Fanfiction.net?
Abe Babe's Fan site?

Majic 05-24-2002 01:02 AM

Heh, thats preety nice. I must admit, its good to see a nice OW poem I like. I'm pretty sure the only other to do soemthing like it was Sligface, but those turned out, eh.

Sal the Mudokon 05-25-2002 11:01 PM

Hey, thanks! It doesnt suck! Fantastic. I'll test my luck with Alf first, but if that doesn't fly, then I'll send it to maybe Abe Babe or Alcar's site. It really is amazing how inspired one can be while bored in the middle of the night.:D

GimmeCoffee 05-27-2002 06:00 PM

I am not drunk!
You stupid skunk!
But I love coffee.
And HATE this toffee!
So I am not a junk.

Nice poem!

oddling 05-29-2002 09:00 PM

Ya that was cool!Hey tell me if my poem bites.
Ahem:
this Mudokon savoir,
may save us all,
from every Mudokon,
little to tall,
chased by sligs,
throughout the night,
though his sacred scars,
shall put up a fight,
the Magog Cartel,
should watch thier backs,
for he rescues thier Mudokons,
in many packs,
Rupture Farms,
has met it's doom,
Soulstorm Brewery,
has done it too,
it is us this hero of the Mudokons will save,
this savoir of the Mudokons named Abe.

Well on a scale of 1 to 10 10 being da best,how good was it.If ya think it sucks thats okay.

Oddling

GimmeCoffee 05-30-2002 03:13 PM

Cool one oddling but... GO OUT OF MY TRASHCAN AND FIND YOURSELF A REAL HOME!!!

oddling 05-30-2002 06:50 PM

This is your trashcan?I thought I was here first.Oh well.I'll go sleep in the slog kennels tonight.Oh wait there closed.The Fleech kennels are open tonight though......oh what am I saying,PLEASE LET ME STAHAHAYYYYYYYYY PLEASE DON"T LET ME DIE I"M TOO YOUNG AHHAAAHAA WHAAAAAAHAHAHAHA BWAAAAAAAAAAHAHAAAAAAA WHAAAAAAAHHHAAAAAAAHAHA.....:crying:

Oddling....AHAHAHAAAAA!!!

brewmaster 06-20-2002 06:16 PM

It Sucks! No only joking it was quite good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sal the Mudokon 06-29-2002 08:35 AM

I give it an 11.9999999999999994 Which is off the chart, so we'll go with a ten. It was less serious than mine and thus funnier. I liked it.

Stripe 06-30-2002 02:26 AM

New poems
 
*Applauds*
I like BOTH of them! 10 to each of ya!

dripik 08-26-2002 04:29 PM

Both of the poems are very good! I like them. :fuzsmile:

Sal the Mudokon 09-05-2002 07:35 PM

Thanks, I noticed that mine was accepted by Oddworld Inhabitants and can now be seen on Oddworld.com in the new Odd Verse section... *sings Micheal Jackon's "Bad"*






WHO'S BAD!

General Drippik 09-06-2002 08:48 AM

BOOOORINNNGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!It was very goooddddd.. and boring, but good and boring and gay and boring and stupid and boring but good.